lol2015 发表于 2023-5-20 15:57   全显示 1楼
加油，作者，最近会所里这个题材的作品很少，期待后续发展。稍微提点建议，这类作品最关键的一点在于对女主角身份的挖掘，这个身份一定要让读者感到兴奋，包括但不限于熟识的初恋女神、高冷的女上司、热情开朗的女性朋友、信任你相信你的好妹妹、有男朋友但是分居的女白领之类的属性，通过对这些属性的描写加上女主无知觉被上受孕的反差才是最让人感到刺激的
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